Friday Fictioneers: Horror… BRIGHT LIGHTS

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You know she is coming.  The Mother of All Bitches.

You thought, if you hide in a dark place and lay very still she might miss you.  It never seems to work that way.  With the lights, she arrives.

Your skin is starting to tingle.  It won’t be long now.  She stays longer each visit.  You hope for a different side this time.

Oh, your family has been very helpful, although you can detect a certain disbelief that she is not as bad as claimed.

You have heard acupuncture helps, but no time for that… the auras are getting worse.

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The photo prompt comes from A Writer’s Perch this week.  Lora Mitchell was good enough to send Rochelle a pic from her New Year’s Celebration.  After reading Rochelle’s story, click on the Frog to see other Friday Fictioneer’s takes.

90 responses

  1. Very nice Mr Strutz. Aura was a good addition

    Michel Date: Thu, 3 Jan 2013 00:31:26 +0000 To: michelann42@hotmail.com

    1. Thank you, Michelann, you are an extremely keen judge of fine writing.

  2. I would “like” this, but it brings back too many memories of my migraine days. All through high school, I missed a day a week. It took me years, literally years, to realize Tylenol really could relieve pain. Well done.

    1. Thank you, you are excused from clicking the ‘like button’. I never had a migraine, but my second wife suffered terribly from them. I could only sit helplessly by and imagine the pain. I was good at running to the pharmacy.

      1. My friends got used to me ordering pizza without cheese (a trigger) and warm water.

  3. Just saw your genre… Horror, indeed.

  4. Dear Ted,
    to those of us who suffer with migraines your cleverly worded story is indeed horror. Thank you for your glowing comments on mine.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

    1. Those comments are well deserved, Rochelle. Your’s are appreciated here.

  5. Our younger daughter recommends Excedrin Migraine. You gave me a headache with this piece so can I really say, “Good job?” 🙂 Unique take on the prompt.

    1. Thank you, Cowgirl… I hope your daughter does not have many.

  6. Oh THAT mother of all bitches. good one^^

    1. Thanks, KZ… loved your story.

  7. I gotta go with wild, weird, and different; all three things I like.
    Scott
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/01/02/friday-fictioneers-historical-fiction/

    1. I like that, Scott. Thank you.

  8. I don’t get migraines…I give them. Up until the the acupuncture I though this was someones mother-in-law.
    Always a pleasure to read your work.

    Tom

    1. HA! I’m sure the first part is correct. And HA to the second, or should it be Har? Thanks for the last.

      1. Little upset with you Ted…I don’t see a warning anywhere on this page!

      2. He said it was horror, Tom. (Let it go….goozfrabba).

  9. Wow, very effective! I knew something was coming that was terrible but I wasn’t sure until I looked up “auras.” I have heard migraines referred to in the sense of fireworks before too. Hope you don’t really suffer, Ted.

    1. Thanks, Perry. Actually, the only bad headaches I’ve had came from hangovers. I have known people who had them, and that’s what they said.

      1. Trust me, Ted. You nailed it. I get those auras. It’s like being in my own little tunnel complete with sparkly fireworks in one eye while the other eye has no vision. They were very scary when I started getting them.

  10. Good One Ted, great Pic

    1. Thanks a lot, Aggie. I’m glad you read my stories.

  11. Dear Ted,

    Have to admit that I have no experience with migraines, nor do I desire to change that. Thought, like Tom, that this was about someone’s mother in law until you added the auras. I sincerely hope that this is fiction most of the time.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    1. Pure fiction, Doug… no migraines in my family. I never even thought of ‘mother in law’… I was thinking more of a monster… hence, ‘Horror’. Well I guess for some, that would be the ‘Mother’. I loved mine.

      Now that I see you are awake, I’ll go find your story… or are you being a purist and posting on Friday?

  12. Nice twist at the end, didn’t see it coming. I was thinking it was related to coming off drugs.

    1. Oh, I could see that. Thanks, Sandra.

  13. You had me at “mother of all bitches” now I want more. Awesome!

    1. Thanks, I don’t know where that came from, it just popped in and I felt it would be how someone would label a migraine. Nice to see you are continuing to be my all time commenter… I do appreciate that.

      1. It’s a tough job, but someone has to do it…with a smile of course.

  14. I had migraines for years, you got it right! Well done.

    1. Thank you, glad to hear that (getting it right), I’ve not had them and I was a bit fearful it wouldn’t be right.

  15. Ted i usually avoid horror, but due to your reputation of fine writing I indulged. Nice job.

    1. I’m glad you did, and that is a nice compliment. I didn’t have a clue what genre to choose… but wanted to fool people… so Horror. I thought your story was very touching.

  16. Excellent sense of anticipation. You had me with ‘Mother of All Bitches’.

    1. I wanted to fool everyone, but didn’t really have a particular thing in mind for Mother… Thanks, Claire. I liked your story.

  17. I just spent the morning in bed with The Mother of all Bitches. Finally, Zomig put her down with the help of Sudafed. Over the counter stuff just doesn’t work for me anymore. It is true, no matter what you do they get you if that is their plan. I’m up and moving now, but I hate losing half the day like that. Great job, sir. I’m not playing this week as I can’t promise to make the rounds.

    1. Glad she left, Debra. You don’t need to make the rounds to play… we would still like a story. I loved your story of the Egg in ‘OPEN DOORS: Fractured Fair Tales’… on sale now at Amazon…

      1. Holy Moly! I replied to this via the drop down menu days ago, but moved my cursor the wrong way and “poof” all my work disappeared. Don’t you hate that? I was chuckling because your response sounded so much like a sales pitch. You are too good to me, Ted.

  18. Two people very close to me have suffered from migraines…this was very descriptive. And I so appreciate the genre categorization as “horror”!!!

  19. Horror it is indeed…that’s what the past few days have been for me…

    1. Oh no! I hope you feel fine now, Boomie. I liked your story.

  20. Thanks Ted, for reminding us of our migraines. Now what’s the cure? Honestly, I thought about someone’s mother in law…..not mine for clarification. You really were creative with this one. Got migraine….Ted got gas for pharmacy run.

    Shenine

    1. Thank you… sorry to bring the memory back… hope they stay a memory for you.

  21. well being a migraine sufferer in the past you captured it well. almost too well. The only thing that helped me was a very dark room and no noise. then I would just pass out from the pain. Now I hardly get them, they came from allergies.

    1. That’s what I have heard, that allergies and certain foods can bring them on. Glad you don’t see them coming too often.

      1. once in the past ten years, I would say I’m on a roll. Thanks Ted

  22. flashes of light, pain, good creative use of the prompt.

    1. Thanks, it was the first thing I thought of after admiring the cool photo… and I don’t get them.

  23. What a twist in the end. I wasn’t thinking of auras at all. Fireworks, indeed. Great interpretation of the prompt.

    1. Thank you very much. Glad you liked it.

  24. A very unique twist on the prompt. On the rare occasions (knock wood) I get migraines, it is rather like fireworks. Nicely done.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/indulgences/

    1. Thank you for the nice comment… glad to hear from people who have had them and related. Hope you have no more.

  25. Hi Ted,
    A sharp story, right to the point. Pokes the reader in the funny bone. A real needle in a haystack. I’m running out of puns. Ron

    1. What… running out?? I don’t think we’ll ever see that day… Thanks for your sharp insight, Ron.

  26. ooh… I do hate migraines. And yes, totally sympathise with the line about people thinking it’s not as bad as you claim. When people claim to have a “migraine” and then are walking around acting normally, I want to get very angry.
    Took me a while to get this, Ted, but I think I’m just on the go-slow today. You cover off many aspects of the pain well. nice job.

    1. I’ve seen them in action… there’s no walking around. Thanks a lot for the comments.

  27. Brilliant! Migraines are a complete bitch and I can’t stand it when people liken it to a bad headache. At first I thought you were talking about a mother in law for some reason – then you mentioned the aura and it all fell into place. Great stuff.

    1. Thanks, EmmaMc… glad you are back!

  28. Terrific description of a migraine. My fiancee’ suffers from them now and then and can last for days. I never get headaches but can see how much pain it causes. I also first thought this was about a mother in law, LOL.

    1. Same here… my second wife had them, and that’s how I know about what they are like. I just had to leave her alone to suffer and get well. Thanks.

  29. Like Doug, I interpreted a Mother in-law angle, but they’ve been known to create migraines too, so I guess I wasn’t too far off base. What ever happened to the Father of All Bitches? We never hear much from him.

    1. I guess he never causes any problems. Lots of people are saying mother-in-law… I had good ones.

      1. *giggles* rgayer, if you were the Father of All Bitches, would -you- admit it? I think he’s in the Witless Protection Program somewhere, raising lolcats. (spelling intentional on “Witless” btw. ;p)

  30. Those are some auras…I love your take on the prompt. Migraines are a bitch! I’m glad I don’t get them, but my husband has them pretty bad sometimes. I think it’s true what you say in that people don’t really think they could be that bad. For me, I can barely handle a slight headache.

    1. That’s what I was told… it is hard to stand by and see someone you love suffer. A very helpless feeling.

  31. in the second paragraph, i’m pretty sure “lay” should be “lie.” regardless, very well done. luckily, it’s nothing i have personally experienced.

    1. Thanks Rich. I thought about that. I had ‘hid’ at first, then changed it. But, I think it should be think/hide/lie or thought/hid/lay. I wasn’t sure which to do.

  32. […] it up as such means I’m going to pretend it is. So let’s bring all the Relayers together: CC, Ted, Delilah, Dawn and Hasty; and I’m going to ask L and Renee along […]

  33. Just wanted to let you know I nominated you for The Lovely Blog Award.
    The rules are at http://mariwells.wordpress.com/2013/01/05/awards/

    1. I’m humbled, thank you.

  34. Amazing story. I so know how migraines can be.

    1. Sorry to hear, Mari. Thanks.

  35. Very clever take on the prompt and you had me fooled until the very end – I didn’t think of migraines when I looked a the picture, which is bizarre as I get loads of them. And as we seem to be sharing remedies, I’ll just add, for all those migraine sufferers out there, that Imigran (sumatriptan) is a miracle cure but pricey (almost a tenner for two little tablets) – I never go anywhere without it.

    1. The power of blogging… helping others get help when needed. Thanks el, and the kind words too.

  36. Very different and novel take on the prompt and the genre.
    I don’t suffer from migraine but I know people who do.
    It is horror indeed. Liked this a lot!

  37. *chuckles* I see we had a similar thought here, as to the beautiful and “awe”-full turned frightening and awful. Loved it, even though/especially since I saw it coming from the Mother Of All Bitches, which was always a favorite description of my own unwelcome visitors. Lucky me, I get the pleasure of Her company twice a month, and have since adolescence. >.<

    Caffeine occasionally works for me, which is why Excedrin Migraine helps some people. It's made of aspirin, Tylenol and caffeine. 😉

    Anyway, thanks for the great comment, and for checking out my "Alice". I've been trying to think of somewhere to submit her, actually…the first ever for me. *shivers*

    1. I was very impressed with ‘Alice’, KC.

      1. Thank you! I was toying with the idea of putting out an e-book with some of my fairytale/literary stuff…Dorme is my Sleeping Beauty from the pov of the Witch/Black Fairy, and I have a few others. Cute little prose story from a contest that does Red Riding Hood with a serious twist. Stuff like that. But I’m such a chicken when it comes to actually letting people see my stuff. The blog was my first step in that direction, but now I know I have to take another one…just don’t know what. *sighs* 🙂

      2. The blog is a good first step. It was for me, and I was really chicken, but you gain confidence with experience. When you feel ready, do it, KC.

  38. great story and you so capture the feelings in words.

  39. I know this feeling!! Freaki’n migraines.

  40. *Freakin’ 🙂

  41. Yes, that truly was horror! Superb description – reminds me of childhood, and really fits well with visual…unfortunately..

  42. now, firework shows will never be the same again…the MOAB will be forever on my mind! creative story, Ted! LOVE it! 🙂

  43. Hey Ted,
    Finally had a chance to click through the site. AK. Migraines.

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