Friday Fictioneers… MUSE

It had been years since he touched a wheel.

Nothing said ‘vacation’ like daytime drinking, and he had been on vacation a long time.  No creative spark in sight.
It bothered him, and in clear moments would go to museums, hoping a muse would find him.

Now, kneading the clay, the familiar slap on the plaster bat bringing it all back, he couldn’t wait till the first kick.  He felt this might save him, for as in times almost forgot, he had no doubts it would be good.

Funny what pointed the way, another artist’s work,  a jeering face saying … “Loser.”


Friday Fictioneers 100 Word Flash Fiction… This week’s photo prompt is by Joyce Johnson… Go see Rochelle… ADDICTED TO PURPLE … for info on how to join us.

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45 responses

  1. Dear Ted,

    Are you by any chance a potter? Or just a really good writer? (Or both?)

    I enjoyed this story because it captures the inner turmoil of the artist, no matter what the medium. Well done.



    1. Guilty as charged… the potter part. Mahalo, Doug.

  2. Hi Ted,
    You packed a lot of story into a short space. I echo Doug. Well done.
    Shalom and happy thanksgiving,

    1. You look like the type to do a perfect turkey, Rochelle… I hope your day was full. Wasn’t sure what to do with this one. I printed out the prompt and had it laying around till something hit me.

      1. I make a great salad, Ted. My sister in law did a great job on the turkey though. I did the same thing with the prompt. I printed it out so it could mock me.

  3. HAHAHAHAHA!!! I get that a lot myself! Great, Ted!

    1. Thanks, wmq… going to read yours.

  4. I loved the deep point of view of the potter here. Waiting for that first kick, slapping the plaster bat – wonderful details, Ted.

    1. I had some practice… thanks, Rochelle.

  5. That was one good piece of writing


    Date: Thu, 22 Nov 2012 22:21:39 +0000 To:

    1. Thanks, Scott. You fooled me with yours.

      1. We were both a bit outside the box.

  6. Great storytelling, Ted. You captured the despair of the tortured artist. Well done!

    1. I like that work ‘storytelling’… thank you.

  7. Clever line that, about the daytime drinking. Good take on the prompt Ted, enjoyed this,

    1. Thank you, Sandra. I would think he came back from vacation.

  8. Nicely done. It certainly feels this way at times.

    Here’s mine:

    1. Thanks, I liked your dream… scary ending.

  9. I hope his art saves him (although this story prompts me to ask what’s in that cup you’re drinking from in the picture!) Artist’s angst well-portrayed.

    Just a couple small things I notice if you’re interested. You only need a comma after “Now” in “Now, kneading the clay” and you could use another quotation mark before “Loser.”

    1. Ooh, Thank You. Punctuation is my greatest fear, and the ; is my biggest challenge. I tried to use one, and I see why it didn’t work. The quote mark was there at one time, wherever did it go… I’ll go find another?

  10. Hi Ted,
    Booze and other writers, sounds like a good combo to me. Well written. Ron

    1. Only in small doses… Thanks, Ron.

  11. I could put myself in the potter’s situation, which means your story worked well for me. Good job.

    1. Thank you so much, Anne.

  12. That’s lack of inspiration well described. 😉 the prompt was hard.

    1. No kidding, but something always seems to come along, if you let it in.

  13. “Loser”. period should be inside the quotes. nothing like being taunted by an inanimate object. lifeless bastards. well done.

    1. Thanks, Rich. I’ve often wondered about that. It’s not a quote, but the end of the line or story. Thank you, Sir, for the kind words too.

      1. occasionally, a question mark will be outside the quotes, but that’s about it. for example, let’s pretend you yelled something, and i’m not sure what you yelled. i thought you said “weirdo.” and i wanted to ask what you said. i’d write: did he yell “weirdo”? the question mark goes outside because when you yelled “weirdo” you weren’t asking a question, but i’m asking a question while also quoting you.

  14. It is those funny, twisted moments that change things.

  15. Well done, Ted. I like that he went searching for the muse, hoping to turn his life around. maybe the mocking face will aid his determination.

  16. Sometimes someone else’s doubt can be the best motivation. Nice job!

  17. You captured the struggle of the artist well. A little outside your norm…I was waiting for the punchline. Instead, I was punched.

  18. Odd that such a face would bring him back, when it might drive others to madness. Wonder if it will all come out as positively as the artist thinks now. Nice quick study of inner angst.

  19. I loved this portrayal of the artistic process. Really, it was beautifully real. Two things, though… First, “in clear moments (HE) would go to the museums.” Second, this sentence didn’t quite make sense: He felt this might save him, for as in times almost forgot, had no doubts it would be good. I think you might be missing another “he.”

    The writing, though, was exquisite.

    1. You know what… I took that ‘he’ out to hit 100. You are right. And, a good story is more important than the word count. Thank you wfan.

  20. I think your creative juices flow just fine. Nice

  21. “Nothing said ‘vacation’ like daytime drinking, and he had been on vacation a long time.” This is such a great lune. It sums up the character and his turmoil so well. Well done.

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  23. “…hoping a muse would find him” (rather than “looking for his muse”)re-enforces his dissipation. Hopefully, becoming productive on the wheel will inspire him to substitute the pen for the bottle.

  24. Loved it! It put a smile on my face and made me chuckle out loud. I so know that feeling. Great bit of fiction, Ted.

  25. been there
    done that

    this is good

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